Language Note of the Week 30

Take three seconds and shorten this sentence:

“What Ralph evokes in Randy is something new.”

“_______ evokes in Randy __ something new.”

Or:

“Ralph evokes something new in Randy.”

Unless you need time to think, or unless you want to up the anticipation, chop the needless “what” and “is.”

Time to think:
“May I take your order?”
“Well, what I would really like to order from the menu is…” (vs. “I’ll have a beer.”)

Upping the anticipation:
“What really, truly annoys me about this menu is…”

All Language Notes of the Week are available at:
http://www2.arnes.si/~bjason/LNW.pdf

(Skupno 5 obiskov, današnjih obiskov 1)
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