Take three seconds and shorten this sentence:
“What Ralph evokes in Randy is something new.”
“_______ evokes in Randy __ something new.”
Or:
“Ralph evokes something new in Randy.”
Unless you need time to think, or unless you want to up the anticipation, chop the needless “what” and “is.”
Time to think:
“May I take your order?”
“Well, what I would really like to order from the menu is…” (vs. “I’ll have a beer.”)
Upping the anticipation:
“What really, truly annoys me about this menu is…”
All Language Notes of the Week are available at:
http://www2.arnes.si/~bjason/LNW.pdf
(Skupno 21 obiskov, današnjih obiskov 1)